LOOKING AT THE STARS's Discussion Board

[maruya]

mar,

so sorry i can't divulge religiosa's role because i want to imbue the story with some sense of suspense and mystery.

yes, i have the facts (at least 90%, that is) but honestly i don't know how the story will unfold, or if i can make it fly for all you readers out there. you see, i'm doing this basically to test myself, whether i can write an interesting tale out of a true incident.
ONO PA NA TEST NA TESTED NA SA GAYUD (the article about iya doni)

what i can promise you is that jovanie's lifestory is poignant, one that deserves to be written. here's hoping i can capture in print the story's essence.

i originally thought of posting jovanie's picture before the story began, as some sort of a teaser. in fact i've texted at-at a million times for it. but now, i decided NOT TO POST IT, that way, the suspense of the story is better served.

abb,

how perceptive! now i regret having divulged religiosa's relationship with jovanie early in the story. that would have whetted more the curiosity of the reader, like maruya herself had asked. maybe i will revise it when the story goes to press? wahahahaha gadahum.

i'll let you in on something: i might introduce a fictional character somewhere to do.......................you know? go figure, again!

yes, "religiosa orillaneda" is her real name. kila mo ini siya kay one year ahead da kamo sa ila sa Purisima. and now it's easy to connect her to totong, and then to jovanie......eng, eng, eng.

K-SPY,
it's just alright, i could patiently wait, you know, if only i could have it printed out, pagaprinta ko na and let my stc friends (faculty and staff) read it......it made me wonder what is the mystery behind jov that he will die that way.......ono isab ka itom na espirito (if it was done intentionally) that came into the mind of the killer that his conscience failed to dictate him not to do so.... after knowing the kind of person Jov is.......perhaps jovanie deserved to live longer.........anyway....abangan ang sunod na kabanata......

ABBS,

oo agaw, it had been mentioned there RE: kalambigitan ni Religiosa kan Jovanie..... if i'm not mistaken, bagan kay kabatch na duch inin si RELIGIOSA,

[Alibangbang]

mar,

yes, i have the facts (at least 90%, that is) but honestly i don't know how the story will unfold, or if i can make it fly for all you readers out there. you see, i'm doing this basically to test myself, whether i can write an interesting tale out of a true incident.

what i can promise you is that jovanie's lifestory is poignant, one that deserves to be written. here's hoping i can capture in print the story's essence.


abb,

how perceptive! now i regret having divulged religiosa's relationship with jovanie early in the story. that would have whetted more the curiosity of the reader, like maruya herself had asked. maybe i will revise it when the story goes to press? wahahahaha gadahum.

i'll let you in on something: i might introduce a fictional character somewhere to do.......................you know?

Mars,

Inaay, excuse me, kay kon sa tagalog pa nang-gigil ako, ako KUBOTON inin yatis na K-Spy

K-Spy,

"Underscore" above are your sentiments I completely respect except for the fact that I disagree. Now... now... hear me out first.

You're given excellent creative writing skills and you believe in Jovanie’s poignant life story. Don't shortchanged yourself go for it. Tell your tale from deep within your heart and I guarantee you, it’ll fly.
It'll fly faster than Toyang's helium filled birthday balloons. Diba Yang?


"i'm doing this basically to test myself, whether i can write an interesting tale out of a true incident”
Whoyyy... Guwapo na tao ini...how much more proof do you need? You’ve proven many times over that, Y O U - C A N - W R I T E . You’ve been published! Bestowed awards so why on earth doubt yourself now? Ay nah ikaw gayud kadayaw mo dayon banga-on (ido) haw e wisi-wisi

i might introduce a fictional character somewhere to do.......................you know?
I think you shouldn’t. You have 90% hard facts. 10% more and you’ll have 100% full circle, foolproof nonfictional story. Don't sacrifice the 90% to 10%. Streamline it. There won’t be any regrets if you take your time, cherry-pick, then build, write your entire story based on your hard earn facts.

When the I’s are dotted, T’s are crossed, then time to install the serialization. (The “sabik” days will commence not just for my dear Toyang, Mars, but ---if not all --- most of us)

If I sound harsh, please forgive me. I believe in you, in your God given talents and abilities. Hope you won't hate me for this.

I HAVE FAITH IN YOU. IKAW PA. Nahala kay an batya astan palopalo gapabot na kanako.

Mars,

Aduys Mars, ingapotan nakay nan lawa inin utok ko di na ako kadumdum sa iya. Bata pa baya ini siya? Hala paaboton ta dakan an sugilanon ni K-Spy.

Matug nakaw? Goodnite...
Kay ako mag laba na

[atat]

yaon looking for..... pang maalala gayud yaon.... abihay ko yaon na sugilanon sa mga libro ko da hibasahi... looyi gayud yaon si jovanie.... last time kami gaiban nan district meet sa bongtud(mga bayani elem. sch.) tibo kami nan event na paga monitor. gahangyo gayud siya na pasilungon ko sa ako payong kay madaut an iya "whitening"....

mana abb,

yaon surrogate mother ni jovanie na religiosa real name gayud yaon niya... batch sila ni duchess...

abangan gayud niyo... haw ugaling may sine nan ini daan gayud "SRO", human manghubag an iyo mata abay tiyaho...

[fiona]

yaon looking for..... pang maalala gayud yaon.... abihay ko yaon na sugilanon sa mga libro ko da hibasahi... looyi gayud yaon si jovanie.... last time kami gaiban nan district meet sa bongtud(mga bayani elem. sch.) tibo kami nan event na paga monitor. gahangyo gayud siya na pasilungon ko sa ako payong kay madaut an iya "whitening"....

mana abb,

yaon surrogate mother ni jovanie na religiosa real name gayud yaon niya... batch sila ni duchess...

abangan gayud niyo... haw ugaling may sine nan ini daan gayud "SRO", human manghubag an iyo mata abay tiyaho...

mana atz, sin o dayon taraw an mo act as jovane kon ugaling hinangan nan sine??? hehehe.....

[atat]

fion, way lain kundi tagon-on da isab si sam!!! aduy malipayi gayud si jovanie kay ganahan sya kan sam....sin-o agaw k_spy?

[fiona]

fion, way lain kundi tagon-on da isab si sam!!! aduy malipayi gayud si jovanie kay ganahan sya kan sam....sin-o agaw k_spy?

hehehe... timing d bya kay iya bya isab idol an mo act. haraw agaw madayon ini.... na sin o dayon traw an iya uyab ug kabit???

[maruya]

Mars,

Aduys Mars, ingapotan nakay nan lawa inin utok ko di na ako kadumdum sa iya. Bata pa baya ini siya? Hala paaboton ta dakan an sugilanon ni K-Spy.

Matug nakaw? Goodnite...
Kay ako mag laba na [/quote]

Abbs,

you mean, jov? he's 28.....di pa ako abb matug kay magplantsa pa ako nan uniform nan mga children sanan barong ni bob...

[toyang]

Fion/atat,

Oissssst! galaong si Sam na bahala na kuno an manager ni ANNE CURTIS ug ni TONI GONZAGA
kun sin-o sa ila duha. (joke!!! )

Atat,

Matay ning, aya da ako maturam na gabasa nan chapter 3 (Looking at the stars) kaina. kalangotay
Sige dakan lamang hay labi wara nay sumpay.

[toyang]

Abb wrote,
Mars,

Aduys Mars, ingapotan nakay nan lawa inin utok ko di na ako kadumdum sa iya. Bata pa baya ini siya? Hala paaboton ta dakan an sugilanon ni K-Spy.
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ABB,

Auntie, inday lamang kun kila mo yaon si Jovanie pero ako niiiiiingar gayud. isa isab ako na gapa abot nan sumpay nan
iya sugilanon. Basin sapoton an writer(k-spy) tapos monthly dakan an pag post niya nan sunod na mga chapters. Sakto da gayud igo mag sumad si Jovanie tapos na isab an last chapter. and in that case, balikon ko na isab pagbasa an chapter one kay kalimtan ko na kun uno adton sinugdanan nan iya istorya. grabe na ka hiwi an alipudhan ko nan yaon auntie.
Hala kay ako na isab an maglaba kuman. hehehe. Regards sa iyo tanan ngaton.

[kampanaryo_spy]

bagan amo gayud ad-on na pamarahe yang, sa sumad na ni jovanie matapos an sugilanon.

kapuyi magsuwat kay magasto sa ato dubdob.

i'd like to thank the people below for sending me inspiring text messages:

from pato: "DALI-A NA ATON IMO NOBELA KAY PROUDI KAMI MGA TAGON-ON KANIMO." and then this: "YAON AKO ISA KA OFCMATE KAY YANGUTANA KUN HAIN KAW KUNO GA TAPOS KAY KADAYAWI MO KUNO MO SUWAT KAY ININ AG SA LAGI KITA MAGPAILA NAN ININ ATO WEBSITE."

from gracey: "MATAY AMOY AKO PERMI PAGA CHEK SA ATO SITE. C SHERWIN GA MESSAGE KNAKO SAB KUN CNO C JOVANIE. INTERESTING KDAYAW. WELL DONE." and this "AS IN. PDE NA INI PANG NOVEL. BESTSELLER GYUD."

SALAMATIRS.

[grasha]

its true gayud k_spy... Gifted kaw gayud. .. even my officemates, gahuwat nan sumad ni Jovanie...

[atat]

sa tanan mga fans nan LOOKING...., (panawagan bya)

huwat-huwat lang naay kamo kay di maapas nan ato writer... ok da garu haw anhi da siya permi sa tago kay madali matagik aton mga concerned people na apiki kan jovanie... anamo paga schedule for interview may mga okupasyon isab...

tagad-tagad lang naay...

balitaw k_spy, dayawin pagka han-ay mo nan istorya kay grabehin following nan thread... bgan sa sunod ya imagine ko mag sign na kaw nan autograph sa paperback na LOOKING....

[kampanaryo_spy]

huwat-huwat lang naay kamo kay di maapas nan ato writer... ok da garu haw anhi da siya permi sa tago kay madali matagik aton mga concerned people na apiki kan jovanie... an amo paga schedule for interview may mga okupasyon isab.

thanks for being my laywer; i appreciate it.

balitaw k_spy, dayawin pagka han-ay mo nan istorya kay grabehin following nan thread... bgan sa sunod ya imagine ko mag sign na kaw nan autograph sa paperback na LOOKING.

wish ko lang.

[kampanaryo_spy]

at-at,

thank you so, so much. without you, Chapter 4 would not have seen the light of day. i-refund ta da kaw nan imo gasto abay text back as soon as Random House gives me a cash advance for the story.

balitaw, salamatirs from the bottom of my heart.

[toyang]

K-spy,

Ay salamat may chapter 4 na. kalaong ko haw sa simana santa mo pa i post. pila pa aton ka chapter an kuwang kamps?
mag atang ako hangtud sa Mayo nan chapter 5 kay bagan maarang na karuga niyo nagton kuman Marso ug Abril.


Atat,

matay at, an tinuod gakatu kay gayud an abil ko kay maghinokay garu ako pagpangutana sa imo (kawatan) kun sin-oy sad-an nan kamatayon ni jovanie para unabis iton di na ako magpanikad ngadi na gabasa. galing kay basin kita habnayan ni k-spy kay paga pinahan kaw raba daan na dili ako pag patulan haw mangutana sa imo. sige dakan lamang.

Bagan mag angot ako At paglukat nan paw haw maka uli ako ngaton kay ihatag ko na isab sa imo haw may "THE END" na nan istorya ni jovanie. waray raba bagan paw sa unidos.